Life is a pure flame，and we live by an invisible sun within us.
Traffic and Population.
In fact，They Are the Same Thing
Look at the picture.There are three different kinds of containers，in all of which is the same liquid—water.But they are labelled differently.Who has done it？Obviously，it is the producer of the commodity.The picture exposes some producers trickery to the public.
Let s go to the market.We can find such trickeries everywhere on the market.A very ordinary product is labelled with a very big or profound name.For example，what is called“Halike”is，in fact，popcorn.What is named“Kelijia”is，indeed，a kind of very common biscuits.
Why do the producers do this？They just want to make profits.
However，whether or not a product can get into the market and sell well greatly depends on its quality.Whatever it is labelled with，if it is a fake product，people won t let it go into their lives.Wh do Jingdezhen s china，Qingdao s beer，Tongrentang s Chinese medicine，and so on sell well on the market at home and abroad？All in all，they have the first class quality.
They product s quality is the life of an industy.Whether an industry can exist，gain the market and develop or not depends on its product s quality.Above all，good quality speaks louder than flowery and empty labels.
把这种“H2O”之类的东西略加归纳，揭示出其共性，发表作者自己的看法，就是本文的思路。这种思路运用的不是“纵向挖掘法”，而是“横向延展法”，其特点是用相似联想法进行横向延展，挖掘其共同的本质，再进行论述，阐明中心。
Help
After school Xiao Mei was going home.It was raining heavily.She held her umbrella walking in the rain.Not for away came a bus.When the bus stopped，an old lady got off.She carried a basket in her arm.For she had not umbrella，the old lady put a handkerchief over her head and walked quickly to prevent herself being caught in the heavy rain.Seeing this，Xiao Mei decided to help her.She went up to the old lady and shared the umbrella with her.Suporting the old lady with her arm，Xiao Mei sent her home.When Xiao Mei was about to leave，the old lady showed her great appreciation to her.Xiao Mei also felt very happy，for to give is much happier than to receive.
本篇习作是一篇上好的佳作。全文要点表述齐全，语言表达通顺，词语运用准确无误。文中有很多句子写得很地道，体现了作者扎实的写作基本功。
A Crow and a Jar
One day，a lucky crow found a jar in the forest when he was thirsty.But unfortunately，half of the jar was empty and the water was too low to get.The crow was a little worried about this.He had a look around and suddenly found that there were some stone.A good idea formed in his mind.He flew to the stones and held on in his mouth，then he flew back to the jar and put the stone into the jar.And so on and so on，the water level gradually became high.At last，the crow could easily get the water.How clever the crow was！
本篇习作要点表述齐全，文中六幅图画描绘得栩栩如生，语言通顺、流畅、简洁。
On Advertisements
Advertisements appear everywhere in the modern society.Good advertisements help to inform us of new products.They help us choose what we need.By telling us what is available on the market，where something is available and how one product differs from another，they may save us money and time.They also guide us in finding suitable jobs.The good advertisements are believable because they tell the truth and they themselves are true.
However，there are also some fake advertisements in the modern society.Actually，every producer says that his product is the best，or tries to give that impression.Therefore，consumers are often cheated by their flowery phrases and empty promises.
Look at the advertising pictures.In the pictures a boy is running to the old pumper with his toy car.He let the pumper pump up the toy car.The toy car becomes bigger and bigger.To one s surprise，the toy car becomes a real car.And the boy gets into the car at once and drives it away.This is an exaggerated advertisements.Anyhow，the toy car can not become a real one.These pictures expose the unhealthy phenomenon in the modern advertising.And every day thousands of people are cheated by such advertisements.
Advertisements，whether we like them or not，are pouring into our life.Not one can avoid being influenced by them.We can easily be persuaded by some advertisements.Unfortunately，this is often made use of by some producers.They pay much for advertisements，but pay little attention to the quality of their products.In this way，their advertisements are false advertisements.Together with other advertisements，they go into lives of people，who certainly don t know how to tell good advertisements from bad ones.
Therefore，to avoid being cheated by false advertisements，we should take a correct attitude：Let advertisements serve our life，but never believe them easily.
夸张的广告是虚假的，广告的生命力在于真实。文章从分析什么是真正的好广告谈起，接着简介、分析漫画，然后联系现实生活中出现的虚假广告及其产生的负作用，论证虚假广告的来源及其危害，最后表明我们对广告应持的态度。文章论证主次分明，有理有据，说服力强。Sending Away the Bragging Persons and
Employing the Talented Ones
The picture manifests a phenomenon in our society nowadays：those people in some enterprises select employees by relying on their boasting during the interview.They just listen to the candidate s introduction while caring nothing about his ability.Look at the three employers in this picture.They are giving the wouldbe employees balloons to blow，which actually means they are giving them an opportunity to brag.We can see nothing but balloons on the desk，so the young man blowing the balloons big，that is，who is good at boasting can easily get the job，while the other three candidates outside the office probably have got no chance to be employed.
There are indeed some people who are skillful in talking，especially in talking big.They boast their ability，wits，experience，and so on.Because of their excellent talent in bragging，they can easily be appreciated by some leaders.
However，if a company wants to run a good business，it should examine the wouldbe employees seriously and strictly，sending away the bragging ones and employing the talented ones.Only in this way can the company be prosperous；only in this way can the talented people exert themselves for our economy construction；only in this way can our economy develop speedily and steadily.
本文立意深刻，结构安排得当。除此优点外，本文还使用了一些值得我们借鉴的句式，譬如：最后一段中的最后三个排比句，它们都是状语前置、谓语部分倒装的强调句，既增强了语势，又突出了内容。
When One s Feather Is Full
The picture tells us a story of a hen and her son.Several years ago，the son left home for advanced study.His mother，the hen hoped earnestly that some day he would use his knowledge to make his poor hometown prosperous.Therefore，while seeing the chick off at the gate of the hut，she advised him to come back after finishing his study.To her disappointments，however，the learned chick，her son，is unwilling to return home，because he looks down upon his hometown for its poverty.
Obviously，the artist is comparing the hut to some poor or backward areas and the hen to the poor people there.And the chick is compared to those college students(including highly educated intellectuals)who refuse to go back to their backward hometown and contribute to its construction.
Nowadays，many students in faraway and backward areas regard entering colleges and universities as a means of leaving their poor hometown and becoming wealthy citizens.After passing the entrance examination to university with great efforts，they catch the chance of realizing their dreams.After graduation，they prefer to find jobs with good pay and conditions in cities，although they know their hometown is badly in need of qualified persons.This has become a social problem.How can those faraway and backward areas attract and keep their local educated students？We think the most effective way is to train their sense of responsibility for their homeland from childhood and to teach them take the poverty of their homeland not as a burden but as the motive of becoming useful constructors for it.
We hope the story of the hen and the chick will have a totally different ending some day.
文章对来自偏远贫困地区的大学生学成后不愿回去建设自己落后的家乡这一社会现象做了细致的分析，说明了导致这一现象的原因，指出解决问题的途径，最后，作者表达了自己的希望。文章语言简练，主题突出，说理透彻，值得大家借鉴。Giving the Seeings a Hand
In the State of Song，an old farmer planted a plot of rice.Every day he went to the field to watch the seedlings grow.He saw the young shoots break through the soil and grow taller each day.But still，he though they were growing too slowly.He got impatient with the young plants.“How could the plants grow faster？”He tossed in bed during the night and could not sleep.Suddenly he hit upon an idea.He could not wait for daybreak.He jumped out of the bed and dashed to the field.By the moonlight，he began working on the rice seedlings.One by one，he pulled up the young plants by half an inch.When he finished pulling，it was already morning.Straightening his back，he said to himself，“What a wonderful idea！Look，how much taller the plants have grown overnight！”With grat satisfaction，he went back home.He told his son what he had done in a triumphant tone.
His son was shocked.Now the sun had risen.The young man was heartbroken to see all the pulledup young plants dying.
People now use“Ba Miao Zhu Zhang”to describe the behaviour of those who are eager to get something done only to make it worse.The idiom is a bit like the English proverb：“Haste makes waste.”—to spoil things by excessive enthusiasm.
作者很注重细节描写，他抓住农夫是如何想办法以及在月光下拔苗等情节来写，突出了农夫的爱苗、助苗的急切心情，这样写使得故事的寓意更加深刻。
The Lazy Woman
In the old times，there once lived an unusual woman.She was much known for her extraordinary laziness.
In everyday life，her husband prepared everything for her.All she cared about was to open her mouth for food and to stretch out her hand for clothing.Her husband didn t like her living way，but he loved her very much.He was ready to do anything for her.They lived together smoothly for years.
One day the husband was to be out travelling for five days.Before he left，he baked a big cake enough for five days to be put in a ring round her neck for fear that she would suffer from hunger for being too lazy to cook by herself.After everything was ready，he started his journey，quite sure that she would not go hungry within the short time.But when he returned，he found her dead for three days.What about the cake？To his great surprise，he saw only the part of the cake near her mouth chewed off，with the rest left intact.
What a lazy woman she was！
文章作者通过自己的想像对画面做了恰当的处理和合理的组织，使懒妇被饿死的原因得以充分说明，读者读后，不禁感到啼笑皆非。
Protect Trees
One day，three young pioneers were on their way home，laughing and singing.Suddenly one of them caught sight of an unusual tree on the other side of the road.The tree s trunk was crooked with all the branches growing to one side，so they decided to do something to save it.Having knocked a strong stick in the earth next to the tree，they tied the tree to the stick to keep it straight.After all the things were done well，they also put up a notice near it saying“Take good care of the tree”.From then on，they came to water it every day.The tree grew better and better with new buds sprouting on the branches.When the teacher know their good job，she praised them.At that moment，they all felt proud and happy with beautiful smiles on their faces.
本篇习作语句通顺、流畅，写全了图画中所有要点并有所发挥，思路清楚，语言句式灵活多变，英语使用地道，几乎没有什么语法错误。
New modern NetSchool
新世纪Netschool 网络系统表
多媒体教学系统使教与学更为方便有趣，在课堂上获取更多信息，学更多知识电子阅读室
远程教学系统向师生开放可向世界各地发送电子邮件可通过因特网（Internet）查寻最新信息只要家中有电脑，任何人都可以学习本校的课程Let me introduce our Netschool to you.In order to make our teaching and studying more convenient and interesting，to get more information in class and to learn more，we developed a Multimedia Teaching System.The Information Centre is always open to us.It s a very good place where you can send emails to all over the world.Besides，you can search for the latest news with the help of Internet.Anyone can study the lessons of our school by Long Distance Teaching System.You see，our school has developed a lot，and has already turns to a modern one.
本文行文流畅，表格内容表述清楚，时态使用基本准确，可见作者写作基本功较好，语言朴实无华，并在文中使用了我们熟悉的一些词组和句型，读来令人备感亲切。
My Father Did It
It was almost 12 o clock at midnight.Little Tom was still busy with his math homework.Seeing this，his father came to help him and did the rest for him.
The next morning Tom handed in his homework on time.The teacher was very angry with him because there were so many mistakes in the work.The teacher asked angrily，“How can you make so many mistakes？”Tom was frightened and had to tell the teacher the truth.“I don t know.”said Tom，in a very low voice，“Maybe my father knows.He did it.”
Then after school，the teacher came to Tom s home with him.His father was astonished to see the teacher when he opened the door.“You did it.Right？”the teacher asked.Tom s father looked at the exercise book and nodded，without saying a word.“Since you did it，I ll beat you.”With these words，the teacher beat the father s bottom heavily.
此文的特点在于生动地描写了整个事情的发展，趋势壮语的运用，更加突出故事的趣味性。同时文中还用到了较多的词组，也增加了句式的变动。
Macao
On December 20，1999.Macao returned to the motherland.The national flag began to flow in the region.History has turned a new page at the turn of the century.Macao is an attracting island region，which lies on the southeast of Zhuhai.It is made up of three islands.The three separate islands have been connected by bridges.It faces Hong Kong to the east.It covers an area of about 23.5 square km with a population of more than 400 000.It has convenient transportation.Now guided by the policy of “one country，two system”，we are sure that Macao has a bright future.
该文所用语言基本上都是正式说明文体的语言，其中使用了定语从句、被动句。句型和搭配：which lies on the southeast of Zhuhai是非限制性定语从句。guided by the policy of “one country，two systems”是过去分词短语作状语表示方式。文中含有对澳门回归祖国的喜悦之情，也有对澳门未来前景的憧憬。
A Large Orchard to Be Built in Xiaguang City
Xiaguang City lies by a railway line，with a highway leading to Zhitai Port and Daocheng Port.It is one of the most important apple production bases in China.Apples grown here sell well both at home and abroad.
It is decided that a 100hectare apple orchard is to be built in the city，where new and fine foreign apple trees will be introduced.By 2005 the output of apples will come to 1 200 tons per year.The project will be started in May，2000 and completed by the end of 2001.80 000 US dollars is needed.
Businessmen in and out of the country are welcome here for a visit and business talk.
根据图画写文章，要仔细看图，抓住图中每一个信息，不可漏掉要点。With a highway leading to Zhitai Port and Daocheng Port这一with的复合结构的使用，使文章显得言简意赅，比起使用从句要好些。
Smoking and Health
Today smoking is a widespread habit all over the world.Not only the old，the youth，but also middle school students have been engaged in smoking.Many of them think that smoking is a smart symbol.
However，smoking is harmful to one s health.It contributes a lot to lung cancer，from which many people have died in the past years.It can also cause many other diseases.In a word，if you smoke，you do have a much greater chance of losing your health.Furthermore，scientific research shows that smoking is not only harmful to smokers themselves，but also a threat to public health，especially to women and children.Therefore，many countries have made laws forbidding smokers to smoke in public places such as cinemas，stations，hospitals and so on.
Give up smoking！If you don t smoke，don t start.Give up smoking for the sake of your health，for the sake of your family，and for the sake of the whole world.
文章作者首先指出吸烟不是个别现象，而是全社会存在的普遍现象，接着围绕吸烟有害于个人健康及吸烟有害于公众健康两点展开了讨论，论述充分、有说服力，最后作者奉劝人们戒烟。整篇文章结构严谨，观点鲜明，论述充分，是一篇好的议论文。
作者在最后一段奉劝人们戒烟时用了重复手法，三次使用了for the sake of短语，起到了增强语言气势、强调戒烟的必要性的作用。
Li Hua s Resume
TitleBicycle or Car1自行车和小汽车都是重要的交通工具
（它们各自的特点）使用方式行驶速度停放地点2你喜欢什么车居住土方生活习惯3我比较喜欢自行车花钱少使用方便不污染My name is Li Hua.I was born in Dalian，liaoning Province in February 1977.I started school in 1984 when I was seven.I studied in Guangming Primary School from 1984 to 1990.After that I went to No.6 Middle School of Dalian and graduated this summer.The main subjects I studied at school included Chinese，maths，English，physics，chemistry and computer.I like English and computer best and I am very good at them.Last year I won first prize in the school computer competition.In my spare time I enjoy listening to popular music and collecting stamps.My favourite sports are swimming in summer and skating in winter.
这种根据图表写出的短文，其信息顺序并不需要大的调整，关键是信息与信息之间的连接及信息的完整成句。根据实际情况，可适当地把图表中名词性的东西以动词性的形式表达出来。如表达学历时用了动词性的“I stated school...”也可用“I began my schooling...”
The Consumption of Energy in Beijing in 1984 and 1994
Year19841994Power(million kw·h)735021249Gas(million cubic meter)326.8801.6Water(million ton)306.6650.9The last decade has witnessed tremendous improvement in every aspect of the city life of Beijing，as is partly show in the chart above.
If we compare the figures of the consumption of electricity in 1984 and 1994，we can observe that there is a spectacular(壮观的) increase from 7 350 million kw·h to 21 249 million kw·h，almost a three fold rise.Similarly，the consumption of gas has risen from 326.8 million cubic meters in 1984 to 801.6 million cubic meters in 1994，partly as a result of a 300% increase in the number of households(家庭)which use gas as fuel.The consumption of water，too，has more than doubled in the last decade，from 306.6 million tons in 1984 to 650.9 million tons in 1994.
The increasing supplies of electricity，gas，and water have greatly promoted urban development as well as the living standard of Beijing citizens.
本文是一篇图表看图作文，要写好这一类看图作文，关键是要以所给图表为中心，始终围绕图表作文，这样就能好好利用表中所提示的信息。上文就是这样一篇范文，作者始终以图表为主，很好地运用了对比说明的方法，仔细说明了从表中所能得到的信息，十分有效地使文章既翔实又不枯燥。
Persons in the Labor Force
This table(图表)shows the changing proportion of farm and nonfarm workers in the labor force from 1830 to 1970.The change is inverse；that is，as the size of the nonfarm labor force increases，the sizes of the farm and nonfarm occupation(占有率)are consistent through the years.
The proportion of farm and nonfarm workers was about equal in 1870.About 95 percent of the labor force were nonfarmers in 1970.The proportion of 70 percent of farmers and 30 percent nonfarmers in 1830 was exactly reversed in 1910.In 1830，70 percent of the labor force was required to feed a relatively small population，whereas in 1970，only 5 percent of the labor force was required to feed a large population.
本文分为两段，首段叙述了农业劳动力和非农业劳动力总的变化趋势；在第二段对表中的几个特殊点进行了说明。从一般到具体，结构简单清晰。首段的“inverse”和第二段的“reverse”用得恰当精练，为文章省了不少笔墨。“farm workers，nonfarm workers”，“farm labor force，nonfarm labor force”，“farm occupation，nonfarm occupation”及“farmers，nonfarmers”几组反义词的运用，避免了重复，使文章呈现出变化。
My Advice
活动时间7月15~22日或8月15~22日活动内容参加英语角学唱英语歌曲
听英语讲座表演英语短剧
看英语电影教外宾学中文对活动内容的
建议或要求Dear sir or Madame，
I m very glad to be invited to the English summer camp.
I prefer to go in July because I ll have to prepare myself for the new school term in August.It seems all the activities you offer are attractive and meaningful.But I d like to attend the English lectures，from which I can get more information on British and American culture.With the coming of the 2008 Beijing Olympic Games，more and more foreigners are eager to know about China.So I hope to teach foreigners Chinese and spread Chinese culture.
It s been a dream for me to visit Beijing.Could you organize a tour around the city during the camp？
Thank you very much.
Yours truly，
Li Ping
本文完全按照题目要求来做，不仅对所选内容作了说明，而且说明了理由。在短文结束前提出了自己的建议：游览北京城。
文中运用了较多的复杂句型，如：because，but，from which，with the coming of等关联的内容。
A Brave Classmate
The bravest student in our class is Wang Ming，who is always ready to help others get out of dangerous situations.
One day Wang Ming and I were walking by the bank of a river.We heard an old woman s loud cry for help.We ran towards her and she told us that her little grandson had fallen into the river.Wang Ming didn t hesitate at all.He took off his clothes and jumped into the river.The cold water made him shiver，but he struggled on.Gradually，he approached the child，then he got hold of his hand and managed to carry the child ashore.
Wang Ming is so brave that he is loved and respected by the whole class.
本文的一大特点是构思巧妙。作者选了一个引言段，说明王明是一位乐于助人的勇敢的同学，这也是文章所要表达的主题；接着作者在第二段根据图意内容具体描述了王明的一次英勇事迹；最后作者在第三段指出勇敢的王明赢得了全班同学的热爱和尊敬。文章首尾呼应，主题突出。
A Traffic Accident
Last Sunday，an old lady aged about seventy was badly hurt in a traffic accident at the second crossing of Weimin Road.It was half past twelve，and there were few cars in the street at the time.The old lady was crossing the street when a young man rode a bicycle，rushed up and knocked her down.The accident happened so suddenly that it had been some time before the other people in the street understood what was happening.The old lady was badly hurt and couldn t move at all.Someone called the First Aid Center and soon some doctors came and carried the lady to the hospital in their car.The police said that it was the young man s fault because he didn t see the red light turning on.
该文采用了因果法，即先写明所发生的事件，然后再交代导致事件发生的原因。这种写作手法特别适合于报道一些突发性事件，强调事情发生得太突然——大家还搞不清楚是怎么一回事儿时，事情就发生了。关于这种情况大家只能事后寻找原因。
Production of Factory A
According to the graph，during the period from 1970 to 1979，there was a gradual decline in the production of radios in Factory A.It fell from 1800 sets per month in 1970 to 1000 sets per month in 1979.Thus，there was a total fall of 800 sets in the monthly output during those ten years.
On the other hand，there was a marked increase in the production of TV sets.The factory produced only 200 sets per month in 1970，but the output(产量)rose to 1200 sets per month in 1979.Thus there was a total increase of 1000 sets per month during the ten year period.The present output appears stable at 1200 sets per month.
本文结构清晰，“on the other hand”这一短语将曲线图涉及的两个方面加以区分。“a gradual decline”和“a marked increase”，“fell”和“rose”等几组对应词的使用，使文章结构趋于平衡。语言简洁明了，用词准确。内容反映了曲线图的大体特征和总的变化趋势，重点突出。
A Visit to Dongfang Farm
May 1st Sunday Fine
When the red sun rose in the east this morning，we，the students of No. 1 Middle School，left for Dongfang Farm.On the way there we marched in the line.Everyone was very happy.Some sang songs merrily.
One hour later，we arrived at the gate of the farm，where we were warmly welcomed.Uncle Li，the head of the farm took us to see the whole farm.There we saw many people working hard in the fields and learned a lot about vegetables and other crops.Until then did we realize that food doesn t come easily.
Around twelve o clock，we were offered a good lunch.After having it on the grass，we had great fun.Some danced，some sang songs，some played games，and others talked excitedly.We enjoyed ourselves very much.Soon it was evening，so we had to say goodbye to the people there.
What a good time we had today！
本文以日记的形式记述了“我”与同学们参观东方农场一事。作者按照时间顺序把参观农场的整个过程描述得有条不紊，详略得当。文章段落层次清晰，文笔流畅。短文第二段最后一句Until then did we realize that food doesn t come easily.是一个倒装句，在此起强调作用，说明直到那时“我们”才意识到食物来之不易，从而说明了“我们”在农场的收获是很大的，“我们”参观农场一事非常有意义。
Picking Up a Purse
An old man，wearing patched clothes，was sitting at a street corner begging，when a welldressed young man came.Just as the young man was passing by，he dropped his purse.The beggar saw it and stood up.“Excuse me，sir，”he said.He wanted to stop the young man with his hand in the air.The young man got angry and said rudely，“I don t have any money with me，so I don t think I can do anything to help you.”But the old man wasn t angry at all and said，“Excuse me，sir.Is this purse yours？I saw you drop it just now.”On hearing the old man s words，the young man s face turned red immediately.He just stood there and couldn t say anything.
作者按照时间顺序采用对比手法把图画中的内容写成了一篇生动而富有教育意义的记叙文。文章一开始就指出老人穿着破旧的缝了好多块补丁的衣服，而年轻人衣着得体；接着写到老人礼貌地搭话想让年轻人停下，而年轻人却很不高兴并训斥了老人。尽管如此，老人还是没有生气并把钱包交给了年轻人。作者对比双方的衣着、言语及具体行动的目的在于说明：一个人品质的高低是不能凭其外表来衡量的，这也正是图画内容所要揭示的主题。
The Relationship of Distances Between the
Driver s Thinking and the Vehicle s Braking
Some people don t believe that driving more slowly can save lives.But the truth of the matter is that driving more slowly can help a person to avoid serious accidents.
The illusration above shows the distance that it takes to stop a car at a given speed.The distance is measured in feet.The shaded area shows that driver s thinking distance.That s the distance that it takes the driver to react to danger that he sees.The white area shows the vehicle s braking distance.That s the distance that it takes for the car to stop once the brakes are applied.The number at the top of each bar show the total number of feet that it takes to stop the car.
对图表的说明有两种情况。一个是对表的构成进行说明，另一种是对表的实际内容作出评价。本文属于前一种，此种解说只需把握该表的主要目的，表中各示意部分所代表的意义及其衡量单位等说明清楚即可，不必作细致的数字说明。若属第二种图表说明，则需要把各数字的代表意义及数字间的联系详细加以说明。
My Birthday Party
whatbirthday partywhen1，July，6：30 p.m.-11：00 p.m.arrangements①put on a pretty new dress
②wait for your friends
③enjoy the delicious meal prepared by your mother
④play games，sing，dance and listen to musicJuly 1SaturdayFine
It is July the first.I m seventeen years of age.Today I had a wonderful birthday party.At the party I wore a pretty new dress.It is blue and white.The party started at 6：30 p.m.and all my friends arrived on time，bringing many beautiful presents with them to share the happy moment with me.My mother had prepared a lot of nice things for us to eat and drink.My friends and I played games，sang，danced and listened to music.All of us had a wonderful time.And after the party，I helped my mother wash the dishes.
写日记时所选择的主要时态没有规定。可以使用一般现在时，也可以使用过去时，应参照写日记当时的时态而定。如本篇中，前两句及中间对衣服进行描述的一句，针对写日记的时刻，是仍然存续的事实，因而用现在时，而有关晚会的一些具体活动，是已发生的事，故使用过去时。有关妈妈准备饭菜一事，是晚会前的事，所以使用过去完成时。
Offender
One day，Jack and I went to the cinema.We only had one bike and I sat at the back.Then we came to the crossroads.Suddenly we were stopped by a man and a woman.We were very surprised.What on earth happened？The man told us the truth.They were stopped by a policeman half an hour before when they came to the crossroads.The policeman told them to stop the next offenders.Then the man smiled at us and said，“Now it is your turn to catch the offenders.Bye！”That day we acted the“policemen”.We had an unfortunate day！
本文要点齐全，行文流畅，表达清楚，语言简练地道。What on earth happened/The man told us the truth/to stop the next offenders表达得不落俗套，非常得体，体现出扎实的语言基本功。但是，篇尾acted该用acted as，意为“充当，担任”。
Picnic
June 1st，1995
Dear Peter，
We re so glad you re coming to join us on Sunday.Here is how you can find us.We ll have our picnic in the People s Park.You know where that is，don t you？After you enter the park by the main gate，walk straight on till you come to a stream.Cross the stream and turn right.After walking for a while you ll come to a hill.Walk around to the other side of the hill.There you ll see a lake.We ll have our picnic there in the small wood by the lake.I m sure you ll have no trouble finding us.Do come！
Yours，
Li Hua
本文抓住了全部要点，行文流畅，表达清晰。文中只有102个单词，11个句子，就用到了三种时态（一般现在时、现在进行时、一般将来时）、六个简短的从句、两个祈使句、一个倒装句、一个反义疑问句，句式可谓多变，句型可谓丰富。
City Change
Dear Mary，
This city has changed a lot in the past 5 years.First，more high buildings have appeared，which are modern and beautiful.Many overpasses have been set up，so it has become very convenient for people to travel.Besides，many families have got cars of their own.The people s life here has become rich and colorful.People can enjoy themselves travelling on holidays.To my delight，I can taste delicious food of different countries such as the food of America，Japan and South Korea.And now it is easier for me to keep in touch with you than last time，for I can email you in my office.
Yours，
Jack
本文表达出全部要点，行文连贯，表达到位。文中把要点按照居住条件的提高、交通便利、生活水平提高、人们开始旅游、饮食业的发展、信息化的顺序进行了描述，使人们看完短文，就能够想像出一幅家乡变化图。
Ideal Jobs
Dear Mr.Smith，
I have recently made a survey among 100 boys and 100 girls about their future jobs.
What boys like to do most is to become scientists and their second choice is to become businessmen.While the largest group of girls would like to be teachers，only a few boys want to do this job.It is interesting that the numbers of boys and girls who want to be doctors are equal.As for lawyer，more boys expect to have their job.However，there are still some students who are not clear about their future.
Yours，
Peter
本文文字不多，但是清楚地概括了学生们的择业倾向。文字简练，表达明了。尤其是在说明数据的过程中，不失时机地加进了一些人情味，使枯燥的数据有了活力。如：It is interesting that the numbers of boys and girls who want to be doctors are equal.
Switzerland
Switzerland lies in the middle of Europe.She is a small country.The population is 6 500 000.Austria，France.Italy and Germany are her nigh boring countries.The capital of Switzerland is Berne.And Geneva is a worldfamous city，where a lot of important meetings are held every year.There are many high mountains and big lakes in Switzerland.People all over the world visit Switzerland each year because she is a beautiful country.It is called“The World Garden.”Her watch，chemistry and food industries are very advanced.People can buy Swiss watches all over the world.The Swiss are hard working people.
I hope some day I will visit Switzerland.
短文从各个方面介绍了瑞士。句子简练，表达清晰，使读者一看就可以对瑞士有一个清楚的了解、全面的认识。文中要点多，但是没有丢落。文中短句多，但是并不散乱。
Extreme Joy Begets Sorrow
Mike was Mr.and Mrs.Smith s only son.They loved him very much.
One day Mr.Smith bought Mike a new bike.The moment he had the bike，Mike rode it around and around.How happy he was！Mr.and Mrs.Smith stood nearby watching happily.Now Mike managed to ride with his hands off.He shouted.“Look at me！”How proud he felt！
While he was looking at his parents cheerfully，Mike sped up the bike.Oh，no！Off the bike fell the overjoyed boy.He got badly hurt.Mr.and Mrs.Smith went into deep sorrow.It was the right saying：“Extreme joy begets sorrow.”
The accident teaches that we must think of danger in time of joy.
短文形象地描绘出画面内容，并作了适当想象，使故事更趋于合理，利于说明“乐极生悲”这一事理。短文最后不忘对“乐极生悲”作进一步的解释。
Making Bread
Bread is not only delicious to eat but also easy to make.You may follow the four separate stages in making bread.
First，mix yeast with warm water.Add half the amount of flour to the mixture，and leave the batter mixture to rise for an hour.Second，add the rest of flour to the risen batter mixture，along with salt and oil.Then knead the dough thoroughly，and leave it to rise.Third，shape the dough into loaves.Then put them into bread tins and leave them to rise.Finally，put the bread into a hot oven.After it is cooked，take it out and put it on wire racks to cool.
That s the whole process of bread making.
短文完整地描绘出烤面包的过程，句子简练，清楚明白。短文顺序性强，无论先做什么，还是后做什么，通过短文中的first，second，third，then，finally，after it is cooked进行了解释。另外，短文的首尾相互照应，使读者感到短文很完整。
Women s Day
On March eighth，Women s Day，Wang Bing had a good idea that he was going to do something to celebrate it.He asked his father to help him.First they did some housework，which was always done by his mother.Wang Bing cleaned the house completely.His father washed all the dirty，clothes.Then they made a good meal，cooking fish，pork，chicken and some other delicious dishes.Wang Bing laid the table and set a vase in the middle of the table.After that，they did themselves behind the door，waiting for his mother.They wanted to give her a happy surprise.Indeed，when his mother came back and saw all of these，she felt very curious and happy.They had a pleasant festival.
短文内容完整，要点齐全，叙事顺序性体现得好，文中使用了first，then，after that，when his mother came back等，使短文条理清楚，行文连贯。结束时的They had a pleasant festival圆满结束短文。
Playing Football
One fine day，four little boys—Kangkang，Liangliang，Chichi and Minmin were playing football in the schoolyard.Suddenly Chichi kicked a high ball and Kangkang tried to catch it and ran after it.But he failed and the ball fell into a hole.The hole was too deep for them to reach the ball.While three of them were wondering what to do，Liangliang disappeared.After a while，he came back with a bucket of water.He poured the water into the hole and the ball floated with the hole full of water.Thus they picked up the ball and went on with their game.
短文中时间、地点、人物、起因、经过、结果都叙述得清清楚楚，无语言文字错误。短文中使用了表达连接的词和词组，使短文行文连贯。Suddenly，But，While，After a while，Thus等词和短语的运用值得模仿。
Our School
Dear Mr.Smith，
I am glad to hear from you.I am very happy to know that you want to know the changes in our school these past three years.Now，our school is quite different from the one three years ago.At that time，we only had one teaching building and a playground on the left of the building.But now we have added another two buildings on either side of the old one.The right is our new teaching building and the left is our library.The playground has been built on the left our of the school gate.And what s more，there have been many trees in and around the school.I wish you to visit our beautiful school again.
Best wishes.
Yours，
Li Hua
该文语言流畅，文字简练，尤其连词(now，and，but)以及短文and what s more运用很自然。本文问题是有三处缺介词，即第二句末these past three years 前少了in，第四句The right is...and the left is...开始和and之后各少了一个on；还有第三句末from the one中，应在the后加old更准确明白。
An Email
Dear Sir/Madame，
I m writing for more information about the day tour to London.As a student at Oxford University，I d like to know if you have any special price for students.As for the money you charge，does it cover the entrance fees for visiting the places listed？What about lunch？Is it included？Or do I need to bring along my own food？
How long will the tour last？Since I need to prepare my lessons for the next day，I d like to know the time to return.Besides，is there any time for shopping？I really want to have a look at the big stores in London.
Yours，
Li Hua
本文有几个特点值得借鉴：开门见山，直入话题，符合英语国家人的思维方式；文中使用一般现在时为主体时态，问句较多，句子长短错落有致、句式富于变化；巧妙合理地使用连接成分，如：As，or，Since，Besides等，使短文行文连贯。
Our School Life
Dear Jeff，
I m Li Hua from Beijing Hongxing Middle School.I m very happy to learn that you re going to stay with my family while you re in Beijing.
While you are here，we ll provide you with a room of your own with a bed，a desk，a couple of chairs and a TV.You ll also have your own bathroom.Our school is quite close to our home，so we could go to school together by bike.At noon we ll eat at the school dining hall.I m sure you ll like the delicious Chinese food there，and enjoy talking with friends over lunch.Classes in our school usually finish at 4 in the afternoon.You can then join other students in playing ball games or swimming.It ll be a lot of fun.
If you have any questions or requests，please let me know.We ll try our best to make your stay here in Beijing a pleasant experience.
Best wishes，
Li Hua
文中使用一般将来时为主体时态。短文中句子有长有短、句式富于变化。短文分为三段，层次清晰。第一段表示欢迎；第二段介绍图片中的信息；第三段告知收信人如有问题，可以提出，自己将尽力想办法解释。全文既有人情味，又有逻辑性。
Waiting for a Rabbit
There was once a farmer who worked very hard every day.One day when he was hoeing in the sunshine，he suddenly heard a low sound“Ping！”.He turned and hurried to the tree.He found a rabbit dying.He took hold of the rabbit and was excited.“What a rabbit！I ll have it for dinner！”Then he had a good idea，“Why can t I want for more rabbits here？It s cool under the tree.”So he dropped off his hoe and waited there.But day after day，there were no more rabbits coming.What was worse，all his crops were dead.
The story tells us that if you want to get something，you must work hard for it.Remember，“No pains，no gains！”
本文有几个特点值得借鉴：讲述故事开门见山，符合英语国家人的思维方式；文中使用一般过去时为主体时态，且有引语，使短文句子长短、句式富于变化；巧妙合理地使用连接成分，如：One day，Then，So，But，What was worse等，使短文行文连贯；结尾处进行总结，并以No pains，no gains！结束短文，升华了寓言故事的寓意，可谓锦上添花。The Bus
It was snowing heavily on Monday morning.Li Hua was at the bus stop，waiting for Bus No.601 to go to school.After a while，a bus came and she got on it.There were many passengers in the bus.Some were talking and some were looking out of the windows.Suddenly the bus stopped.The driver turned around and said，“Sorry.The bus has broken down.Please get off and help push the bus.”When they heard this，Li Hua and the other passengers got off the bus.They worked hard together，pushing the bus slowly forward.Soon the bus was running again.All the passengers were smiling and the sun was shining.
全文使用过去时，符合讲故事的要求。短文当中的句子主语各不相同，避免了全文使用“she”的毛病，句式结构丰富多变。既有Waiting for...，pushing...forward这样的伴随状语，又有after a while，suddenly，when，soon，and等连接成分，使短文既有条理，又行为连贯。如果能够再加上下面一句更好：Standing on the moving bus，Li Hua felt more than happy and warm.
Should Students Make Friends Online？
赞成的理由反对的理由你的看法1.广交朋友
2.可自由表达思想
3.利于外语学习1.浪费时间
2.影响学习
3.可能上当受骗？Should students make friends online？Some people say yes.The Internet helps make many friends.Chatting online，students can more freely express their feelings and opinions，and even get help with their foreign language studies.
Others，however，think students should not.They say making friends online is a waste of time，which should be spent more meaningfully on study.Besides，some students get cheated on line.
It is my opinion that students should place their study，health and safety before other things.As for friendship，we can readily find it in our classmates and other people around us.
短文分为三段，第一段说明yes的原因理由，第二段是no的原因理由，第三段为作者自己的观点，层次清楚。文中使用了and even，however，besides，as for等连接成分，使短文行文连贯；结尾处进行总结。但是，如果能够加入：In a word，every coin has two sides.结束短文，可谓锦上添花。My Opinion on Cheating in Examinations
主要原因考试偏多、偏难不用功、懒惰取悦父母、老师个人看法作弊不对、违反校规要诚实，努力学习……（其他看法）It is known to us all that some students cheat in examinations at school.
As students，we often take examinations at school，but sometimes we have too many examinations which are too difficult for us.On the other hand，some of us are lazy and don t work hard at their lessons.So when taking examinations，they sometimes cheat in order to get better results to please their parents and teachers.
In my opinion，it is wrong to cheat in examinations because it breaks the rules of schools.We students should be honest and try to get good results by studying hard instead of cheating in examinations.What s more，we should improve our study methods and get well prepared for examinations.
段落凸现了文章的层次，逻辑性强。联结成分as students，but，on the other hand，so，in order to，in my opinion，and，instead of，what s more等的恰当使用使短文行文连贯，一气呵成。A Broken Chair
It was on Monday morning that when Xiaogang stepped into the classroom，he found his chair broken.Meanwhile an idea occurred to him.So he looked around and make sure no one was watching him.Then he changed his broken chair with Xiaohua s good one at a rapid spread.A few minutes later.Xiaohua appeared and she found her chair broken at first sight.It seemed that she felt a little surprised.But that expression just lasted a few seconds.To Xiaogang s surprise and embrassment，Xiaohua took the chair to be fixed without the slightest hestitation.(Through)He really didn t know if he should tell the truth.Finally he made up his mind and went up to help her.
文章以强调句开头，给人以良好的印象。文中使用了一些连接成分，使文章如行云流水。Mobile Phone
As can be seen from the chart，great changes have been taking place in the ownership of mobile phones in China.From 2002 to 2005，the owners of mobile phones have increased year by year.Mobile phones have many advantages.They re convenient.Whenever and wherever you make a phone call，you can get in touch with each other.Mobile phones can meet different demands.They can be used to give short messages，surf the Internet and so on.However，they also have many disadvantages.If you answer a wrong call，you have to pay for it.And the radiation of them is harmful to people.
开头点题，说明中国手机的拥有发生了很大的变化。此句对每年的变化情况进行了总的概述，用得非常精妙。Reading Interests of Senior Middle School Stduents
Recently，a survey has been done to find out the reading interests of senior middle school students.In this survey，one thousand senior middle school students from ten schools in Hubei Province were interviewed.They were asked which they like reading most among the four categories of English articles：news，stories，popular science and articles about learning methods.
The survey shows that more than half of the students like to read news most.Twentysix percent of the students say that English stories are their favorite.Only seven percent of the students are most interested in reading articles about learning methods.However，the number of students who enjoy reading popular science articles doubles that of those who prefer reading articles about learning methods.
本文结构合理，叙述清楚，层次分明，重点突出，段与段之间、句与句之间衔接自然。作者运用了多种句式。如：which引导的定语从句They were asked which they like reading most among the four categories of English articles...作者还灵活运用了衔接词，如：recently，however。
Our Library
June 8
Dear Bob，
Thank you for your last letter asking about our library.
Our library is the center of the school.There is a beautiful garden in front of it and our classroom building is right behind it.The library is big.When you get inside，you will see many shelves full of books on different subjects.There are also lots of newspapers and magazines.We borrow books and do some reading in the library.According to the rule，every students can borrow up to 5 books each time and keep them for 10 days.It is open from 9 a.m.to 7 p.m.from Monday to Friday and closed on weekends.
We all like our library very much.
Best wishes！
本文是一封书信体裁的说明文，开头语符合书信的特点。首先点出图书馆的位置，起到了主题句的作用。作者观察仔细，文章要点齐全，并在此基础上进行了适当的扩充，使内容更加丰满，信息传达更加清楚。另外，文章语气得体，结构紧凑，布局合理，并有效地使用了连接成分。
2007 Affect China s Person
姓名孟祥斌性别男出生年月1979年4月9日籍贯山东省齐河县家庭住址山东省齐河县刘桥镇刘桥村主要事迹：(Meng Xiaogbin)生前为驻浙江金华（Jinhua）某部（a local PLA unit）中尉军官，2007年11日30日，是妻子叶庆华到部队探亲的第二天，孟祥斌为了多抽出点时间和家人团聚，请一周的假，陪妻子和三岁的女儿到街上买东西。在准备去给女儿买红鞋的时候获知一女青年因失恋而跳入江中，正在水中挣扎，生命垂危，孟祥斌毫不犹豫地从10米高的桥上跳入冰冷的水中。女青年获救了，他却在妻子和三岁的女儿的眼前壮烈地牺牲了，年仅28岁。The next person I want to introduce is Meng Xiangbin，who was born in Liuqiao，Qihe，Shangdong Province.Before he died，he was a lieutenant of a local PLA unit in Jinhua，Zhejiang Province.It was on November 30，2007 that his wife and daughter came to see him.In order to spend more time with his wife and daughter，he asked to have seven days off.On their way to buy a pair of red shoes，he found that a girl had jumped into the river to commit suicide.For it was in winter，water in the river was very cold，the girl may be very dangerous.Without hestiation，Meng Jumped into the river from the 10meterhigh bridge.At last，the girl was resured，but Meng died.Meng is so great that we will remember him forever.Now welcome Meng s wife to our stage！
文章结构紧凑，语句通顺，前后连贯，表达准确。
Xinhua Stamp Printing Factory
Xinhua Stamp Printing Factory lies 15 miles away from the center.When you step into the factory，you can realise it is not only a modern factory，but also a beautiful garden.Because flowers come out in changing seasons，the grass and the trees also are the ease for the eyes.In front of the gate stands the office block.Behind the office building，there is a conference hall and a big playground.At the left side of the playground we built two shower rooms and two workshops.A big garage and two workshops are located on the right side of the playground.At the end of the playground you can see four big dorms in which live our workers.
That is all I want to say.Please enjoy yourselves there.
文章要点全面、用词准确、行文流畅。能灵活运用倒装句和There be句型。较好地完成了写作任务。今后要避免文章的开头部分出现错误。要以精美的开篇给阅卷以享受。
Dear Bob，
Thank you for your last letter.I m so glad to hear that you ll come to learn Chinese in Jianxin Chinese School in September.I ve found a place for you.
As you wanted，the room has a bedroom，a bathroom，a kitchen.There is a bed，a sofa，a desk and a chair in the bedroom.It s about 25 square meters on the third floor，whose window faces the Fangcao Street.
It s not far from Jianxin Chinese School.You can take Bus No.11.It s only one stop.
By the way，you have to pay 500 yuan for the room every month.I m expecting your coming.
All the best！
Yours，
Li Hua
本文文体运用娴熟，行文轻巧灵活，简单句、复合句结合使用，张弛有度，尤其是定语从句的使用别具一格。
周末活动（减负前）周末活动（减负后）白天：上课、做作业白天：参观博物馆、学习电脑、绘画等晚上：做作业晚上：看新闻、读书、看报就寝时间：11：30就寝时间：10：00Dear Dick，
I m very glad to hear from you.Now the students learning load has been reduced a lot.All this is due to the rule made by the Ministry of Education that every school must not leave too much homework for students to do after class.How happy we are since the rule was put into practice.In the weekends，we can visit museums，learn painting and how to operate computes.These changes could have never been thought of in the past.
But in my opinion，some people fail to realize the nature of reducing students learning load.Though teachers don t give us much work to do，parents force their children to put their minds into books after school.So we can see the rule cannot work by itself.We should let people understand the real meaning of reducing students learning load.
Best wishes.
Yours，
Li Hua
这封书信感情真挚，流露出作者对减轻负担的欢迎之情。主题鲜明，言简意赅，内容翔实。并对一部分人，特别是家长对这一政策不能贯彻到底提出了批评，最后在结尾发出呼吁，“let people understand the real meaning of reducing students learning load”，使得文章具有更深的意义。不足之处是本文论述过于宽泛，没有较强的针对性。
Dear Editor，
I am a student of Sercior Three in a middle school in Fujian Province.
In order to make the most of learning materials our school is arranging an activity for us.It calls on the students of Sercior Three to donate their used books，newspapers，or magazines to the lower grade.The activity is aimed at promoting friendship and encouraging economy.The idea is very popular among the students.And it s highly prosed by the teachers.This activity will be held on the first floor of our library and it will last ten days from June 10th to 20th.
If we all make a small contribution to it，a great deal of resource will be saved.I m looking forward to seeing this meaningful and helpful activity going on in the future.
Yours，
Li Hua
文章要点全面、层次清楚、语言流畅，较好地完成了写作任务。今后要注意用词准确。
Waiting on MidAutumn
It is MidAutumn Day，a traditional day of great importance for Chinese.Time now being a quarter past one，Grandpa and Grandma are still waiting for their son，daughterinlaw and grandchildren coming home，with those prepared，delicious，but already cold food set on the table.Grandpa gets his hands on a phone，wondering whether he should call to check out what happened to his offspring，while Grandma impatiently watches the closed door，trying to listen to the steps of her children coming home.What a terrible day，though originally scheduled for family getting together，celebrating the reunion.
People nowadays spending MidAutumn like Grandpa and Grandma are usual in modern society.With a society in fast lane，people s life has changed a lot.Usedto extended family separates into smaller family，typically away from the original family.And high pressure in work and life contributes to people s lateness of getting back home.So under the circumstances，how to maintain the traditional value is a question presented for everyone to think about.If those valuable traditions disappear，people would have a bigger problem to deal with：how to rebuild culture that has gone.
本文全面清晰地描写了画面内容，涵盖了所有内容要点；叙述应用了较多的语法结构和较高级的词汇；全文脉络清晰，分析到位，运用了必要的连词，从中可看出作者的语言功底较深厚。
An Instruction for Shopping Center
有关事项内容说明营业时间上午8：00—11：00经营商品一楼：日常必需品二楼：服装三楼：电器四楼：办公用品产品齐用，货真价实特别服务电话服务导购服务供货需求联系电话 68426688或68424488Hello，welcome to our shopping center！Now please allow me to introduce something to you about it.
The first thing customers should keep in mind is that the shop remains open from 8am to 11am.
The first floor sells daily goods as well as food.If you want to buy clothes，you can go to the second floor，where you can find whatever you want，which is a feast for eyes.In order to satisfy more people s needs，we open the third floor used for eletrical appliances.And the highest floor provides the things for people who work in the office.You can combine shopping and entertainment at the same time.
Beside，we also offer many extra series，such as telephone series，guidence serives and so on.
In shot，our products are cheap but of good quality，please keep in touch with us by calling 68426688 or 68424488.
Thank you！
开头符合文体格式，全文基本无误，表语从句用得恰当，连接词用得自然，这么枯燥的说明文，经过作者的叙述使得文章生动活泼，已有如身临其境的感觉，算得上一篇佳作。
Do or Don t
Do you understand this cartoon？Let me tell you.One day，the son wanted to help a little girl up when she fell over，but his mother stopped him and said，“Don t do that，otherwise others will think it was you who knocked her down.”A few days later，the mother was shocked at seeing her son just let the fallen oil bottle be.She asked him why he didn t put it in place，but the boy talked back，“If I had straightened the bottle up，you would have thought that I did it.”
I disagree with what the mother did in the story.I think parents should set a good example to their children.They should not only care for their children s health，but their minds.They should let their children know it s a pleasure to help others who are in trouble.We live in the society which is a big family for all of us.Everyone should do something good to build up our society.
文章先描述图片中的故事，然后进行论述，条理清晰，说理透彻。作者敢于使用复杂句型，表现了较强的写作能力。
Health
保持健康的重要性保持健康的方法保持健康的结论你的看法1.多吃水果蔬菜，保持饮食平衡，避免含糖量高、脂肪含量高的食物：
2.多锻炼、强身健体；
3.改掉不良习惯。你的看法Health is far more important than wealth.Good health enables us to enjoy our life and achieve what we hope for in our career.On the contrary，poor health leads to nothing.Since health is so important，how to keep good health？
Firstly，it is very important for us to take more fruits and vegetables because they provide vitamins，and we have to keep a balanced diet.So we should avoid eating food with lots of sugar and fat.Secondly，we d better exercise every day to make our bodies strong.Besides，we have to avoid too much work pressure.Finally，we have to get rid of those bad habits that damage our health，such as drinking and smoking.
In conclusion，if we stick to the advice given above and keep a good mood，we will keep in good health.
本文分三个段落，第一段谈健康的重要性，第二段谈如何保持健康，第三段谈结论，层次十分清晰。第一段用对比的方式，提出健康的重要性，观点鲜明，重点突出。第二段作者用到了很好的连接词，firstly，secondly，finally，使前后自然衔接，内容具有很好的连贯性。另外还用到了很多好的过渡词On the contrary，In conclusion，使文章读起来很自然。
Weather
New Zealand has good weather in all seasons.December，January and February are her summer months，and June，July and August are her winter months.In New Zealand，however，it is not very hot in summer and not very cold in winter.The highest temperature is only a little above 25℃ in Auckland，which is the“hottest”in summer in the country.The lowest temperature in New Zealand s winter does not reach zero centigrade.From summer to winter，the greatest change in temperature is in Queens town.
In New Zealand，it is not too hot in summer and not too cold in winter，so it is a good place for a visit.
该文是一篇图表型的关于新西兰气候的说明文。做这类题首先是认真读图，分析各个数据之间的关系。找出其共性与不同点，得出结论。本文先概括了新西兰的气候，然后从冬夏两个季节进行比较，结构层次非常清楚。最后，又用一句话来概括总结，描写了新西兰宜人的气候，前后照应，不失为一篇优秀的文章。
Dos and Don ts for the 2008 Olympic Volunteers
DosDon ts待人礼貌友好避免不得体的言行坚守岗位不忘履行自己的职责介绍中国的历史和文化不损害祖国的形象如果你成为志愿者，你还应该做什么，不应该做什么。
（内容由考生自己定）Firstly，they should be polite and friendly to the athletes and visitors from all over the world，and avoid improper behavior.Secondly，they should stick to their posts，offering good services，satisfying any reasonable needs and being ready to help those in difficulty，and never fail to do their duty.Thirdly，they should introduce the Chinese culture and history to foreigners so that they may know China better，and never say or do anything that harms the image of our motherland.
If I have the honor to be chosen as a volunteer，besides these above，I will work hard and creatively，and never be lazy.I will follow the laws and discipline，and never break them.I will take the opportunity to make friends with the athletes and visitors，and help make the 2008 Olympic Games a great success.
本文为情景式说明文，文章列出了全部要点，重点突出志愿者的言行，列出了应该做什么、不应该做什么的几种情况，表达清楚明白。作者注意语言的运用，动词时态正确，运用丰富恰当，并用了很多分词结构，且合理运用过渡词以使文章行文流畅。
A Brief Survey of the Traffic Accidents on Link Road
A survey conducted recently shows that the change of traffic accidents on Link Road from 1999 to 2008.
Before 1999，there were not so many cars as now.So the number of traffic accident is small.Later，with the development of our society，many cars appeared in the street.Owing to the lack of traffic facilities like traffic lights，in the year 2000，the accident rate increased sharply from 5 to 35.Then the government realized the seriousness.To avoid the traffic accidents，the government equipped the road with better facilities，so the accident rate decreased sharply.However，in the following three years，the accidnet rate kept almost at the same level.
From 2000 then on，more steps have been taken by the local government，such as making improving people s awareness，improving the road conditions，and so on.
To conclude from the chart，there will be few accidents in the future as long as our government pay more attention to the traffic and take more measures.
第一段总的概述了整个交通事故的变化情况，简洁明了，全文分段描写，层次分明，结构清晰，灵活运用了多种表达方式，使文章自然，流畅。最后一段总结全文，提出措施，符合说明文的特点。
A Letter
旅游资源许多世界著名的风景名胜，如九寨沟（海子：清澈见底；色彩斑斓）、都江堰水利工程（2 000多年的历史，仍在发挥作用）相关信息气候适宜，交通方便
Dear Nick，
I m glad to hear that you re coming to Sichua in August.You ve made the wise choice to travel here.Sichuan Province is rich in tourist attractions and has many worldfamous places of interest，such as Jiuzhaigou and Dujiangyan Irrigation Project.
Jiuzhaigou is wellknown for its beautiful lakes，of which the water is clear and looks colorful.It can excite visitors imagination.Another attraction is Dujiangyan Irrigation Project.It was built over 2 000 years ago and is still playing an important part in irrigation today.Besides，the nice weather and convenient transportation here can make your trip more enjoyable.I m sure you ll have a good time.
I m looking forward to your coming.
Yours sincerely，
Li Hua
本文覆盖了所有的内容要点，格式正确，结构紧凑，完全达到了预期的交流目的。开头简要提出四川有名的景点，然后详细地说明两大景点的特色，结尾处表明了作者的愿望，完全符合书信格式。文中应用了较多的语法结构和词汇，有效地使用了语句间的衔接词，如：be rich in，play an important part，another，besides等，由此看出作者具有较强的语言运用能力。
English Learning Age
一些同学认为另一些同学认为1.应从儿童时期开始学习英语
2.儿童时期记忆力好，可以记住很多单词
3.能为以后的英语学习打下坚实的基础1.不应从儿童时期开始学习英语
2.儿童时期既要学汉语拼音又要学英语、易混淆
3.会影响汉语学习和今后的英语学习讨论未取得一致意见
The students of Class 3 had a discussion about whether it is necessary to start learning English from childhood.
Some of them think that English learning should start from childhood.As little boys and girls have a very good memory，they can learn a lot of English words by heart.This will help them lay a foundation for their future English learning.
But others do not agree.Young children have to learn Chinese pinyin at school.If they study Chinese pinyin and English at the same time，it will be very easy for them to mix them up.This will do a lot of harm not only to their Chinese learning but also their future English learning.
In short，the students have not arrived at any agreement yet.
本文结构严谨，层次清楚，恰当地使用了连接词语，使文章前后连贯。如：but，at the same time，in short等。另外，语言流畅，措辞恰如其分，句式变化多样。如：lay a solid foundation，mix...up，by heart等词和not only...but also...句型。不失为一篇优秀的作文。
Story of a Tree
Once there was a family living in a cabin under a huge tree.Its strong branches and thick leaves kept the family safe from the wind and rain.Sometime later，they cut down the tree with an axe，as they were building another cabin.They needed the wood for its walls and the branches and leaves for its roof.But before the completion of the new cabin，there came a storm.And strong winds blew away the roofs of both the old and new cabins，because the tree was no longer there to protect the place from the wind.
文章言简意赅，要点齐全，叙述十分准确。结构清晰，开门见山，一开始就交代了故事发生的基本情况；按事情发生的先后顺序描述，环环相扣；前后照应，很有层次感。
America
America，one of the most developed countries，is surrounded by the Atlantic Ocean and the Pacific Ocean.The northern land neighbour is Canada，and the southern is Mexico.America，made up of 51 states，owns the land of 9 360 000 square kilometers.Besides，the U.S.A. is also known as one of the biggest countries in the world，with a population of 230 000 000.
Recently the friendship between Chinese and Americans has developed fast，and people of the two countries have begun to known more about each other.The whole world will benefit a lot from the friendship and cooperation between the two big countries.
作文要点全面，句式灵活，表达准确，能恰当地使用连接成分，使文章如行云流水。
Noise Pollution
问题危害措施噪音随处可见，可有人认为噪音不会造成严重问题实际上噪音对人的身心健康会造成很大危害我们应该积极采取措施防治噪音污染In modern cities there are noises everywhere，but people seem to be used to these noises.They do not take much notice to these unpleasant sounds around them.Therefore，people never believe these sounds will be a serious problem.
However，they are wrong.In fact，noises can do great harm to people s physical and psychological health.Staying in a noisy circumstance for too long will not only damage people s hearing but also cause discomfort of their bodies，and also they will feel nervous and lose their temper easily.
Since noise is a serious problem，measures must be taken to control it.Laws and regulations should be passed to reduce the noises in the city.Only in this way can noise pollution be brought under control.
本文第一段提出问题，即人们不重视噪音污染，第二段说明其危害，第三段介绍解决问题的措施，层次分明，结构合理。最后一段连续使用了三个情态动词和被动语态，表现出作者严肃认真的态度，达到了较好的语言效果。文中用到了Therefore，However等承接词，很有逻辑性。最后还用到了倒装句Only in this way...，起到了强调作用。
Differences Between China And The United States
CountriesThe USAChinaArea9.4 million km29.6 million km2Population283 million1.3 billionLanguageEnglish， SpanishChinese，Mongolian，etc.Minority groupsBlacks，Jews，American Indians，etc.Tibetans，Miaos，Yis，etc.Important citiesWashington DC，New York，Los Angeles，etc.Beijing，Shanghai，Guangzhou，Chongqing，etc.Dear Jenny，
I m very glad to talk with you about the differences between China and the States.
First，the State has an area of 94 million km2 while China has 9.6 million km2.Second，there s a population of 283 million in the USA.However，China has a population of 1.3 billion，which is much larger than that of the USA.Third，there are differnt languages spoken in the USA，among which English and Spanish play the mare part.There the whites as well as blacks，Jews and other racial live together happily.In China，Chinese is the mother tongue，but we also speak Mongolian，Yis and so on.Because of our long history we have formed a big family in which Han and other 55 nationalities get on well with each other.
At last，Washington DC and Los Angeles，etc are the most important cities in the USA.Here in China，the most important are Beijing，the capital city，Shanghai and so on.
If you want to know more about the differences between China and the States，please let me know.
Yours，
Li Hua
这是一篇表格式的对比型说明文，表中信息非常之多，而作者却能做到条理清楚，层次分明，是非常难得的。文章引文流畅，衔接非常自然。连接词用得非常巧妙，如引对比时，用到了while，however，but等词，避免了单一与重复。又如First，second，than，at last等使结构非常清晰。总之，这是一篇非常不错的习作。
Taiwan
Taiwan lies to the west of the Pacific Ocean.North of its lies the East China Sea and southwest，the South China Sea.The Taiwan Straits separates Taiwan from Fujian.
Taiwan is the largest island in China.It has an area of about 36，000 square kilometers and it has a population of over 20 000 000.
It s rich in natural resources.Bananas，rice，tea and so on are famous at home and abroad.Clothes，food，electronic products and so on are also wellknown all over the world.
Taiwan has been a part of China since ancient times.Most people of the island came from Fujian and Guangdong.All the people on both sides of the straits desire to unite our motherland.
本文是一篇介绍地点的说明文。先写地理位置，再介绍人口与面积，最后介绍了自然资源与特色，并表达了海峡两岸人民的愿望。
文章的表达方式多样，语言地道。如：lie to，have an area of，have a population of，be rich in，at home and abroad，have a strong with等；还用到了倒装句和省略句。如：North of its lies the East China Sea and southwest，the South China Sea.
Sculpture
I think the artist wants to show changes in the city.From the picture we can see that the man stands for the old generation in China.He is wearing oldfashioned clothes that date back to the beginning of the twentieth century.Now he is looking at the laptop in great curiosity.
After thinking hard，he was still unable to figure out what it is.The girl，on the other hand，is totally different.She has long hair and wears a fashionable skirt.While the man doesn t know anything about the laptop，she plays with it skillfully.The striking differences between the two show rapid changes in people s life in China.Do you agree with me？
文章最大的亮点是句式运用丰富多彩，宾语从句、定语从句、状语从句在文章中都用到了。再者，短句的运用也很广泛，尤其是date back to，in great curiosity，figure out，on the other hand等短语的运用，使上下文衔接自然，语句表达地道得体。文章结尾用了一个疑问句，别出心裁，别有一番味道，显得与众不同。
讨论内容高考是否应该取消听力考试讨论结果反对取消理由听力是语言学习的重要组成部分；对英语教学是一种促进；交际的需要；听力测试中存在的问题可以克服Dear editor，
According to the Ministry of Education，each province will decide whether or not listening comprehension is to be included in the NMET.After a heated discussion，we think listening is quite necessary and can t be taken out of the English examination.
Firstly，listening，speaking，reading and writing are four main skills of language learning，listening comprehension is as important as the other three.Secondly，listening will certainly do good to English teaching.Moreover，it is most valuable in our daily communication.
Of course，we admit that sometimes something unpleasant did happen in the listening test，but it is certain that we can find better ways to avoid the problems in listening tests.
So we are strongly against the idea that we won t have listening tests in the coming English examination.
Yours truly，
Wang Hua
作者从三个方面陈述了反对取消听力测试的理由，要点齐全，结构严谨，用词恰当。全文衔接自然，有一气呵成的感觉。
New Outlook？
We can see in the picture that one person is asking the other to do some voluntary labor，but the other feels it very funny，saying，“Are you kidding me？Times have changed and doing voluntary labor is already out of date.”
It is true that with the development of economy，many people have become rich.However，with their wallets full，some people have changed their outlook on value，laying too much emphasis on nothing but money and personal interests.At one time，serving the people heart and soul was glorious，but now it is being constantly laughed at.
In my opinion，spiritual civilization is as important as material civilization.Nowadays，the government advocates setting up a harmonious society.Therefore，people should reply to the call with action.If everyone does a little bit for others and the society，our world will be a much better one.
本题通过漫画来反映一种社会现象，写作时首先要仔细观察，包括图片及上面的文字，领会画中所要表达的意思。作者发表了自己的看法，进行了合理的发挥。文中用到了比较好的过渡词，如however，at one time，in my opinion等，使文章衔接自然。
Recently a survey has been done to find out the cause of obesity among high school students.1 000 students in ten schools in Hebei Province were interviewed by questionaire.There are four main reasons for the obesity problem.First，thirty percent of the students get too fat because they seldom take exercise.Another thirty percent of them eat too much food which contains too many calories.Then，about twenty five percent of the students believed that they get fat because of family genes.The last portion of fifteen percent think that they put on weight just because they did not realize the harm of the obesity which causes heart trouble，high blood pressure and some other diseases.
这是一篇图表型说明文。作者对图表观察仔细，对数据分析细致入微。文章覆盖了全部要点，行文连贯，使用了一些连接成分，如first，then，another等。在表示百分比时采用了不同的表达法。如thirty percent of the students，Another thirty percent，about twenty five of the students，The last portion of fifteen percent等，使文章富于变化。
As a saying goes：Books are ladders of people s progress.The history of mankind over thousands of years tells us that books are important.It is books that help man make more and more progress.Everyone born with nothing learns from books which our ancestors left for us，which do not satisfy our demand.On the base of farmer knowledge people explore the world widely and deeply which make our lives between and better.
文章以格言起头，显出文彩，还使用了强调句、非限制性定语从句等复杂结构。写出了图片背景的意义，是一篇优秀习作。
看图作文(Writing Through Picture)就是依据图画所表现的情景、表格所提供的信息，按规定的题目或要求写作。看图、表作文是近年高考英语作文经常采用的形式之一，它往往把观察、分析结合起来，把形象思维和抽象思维结合起来，把说明、议论、记叙和各种应用文体结合起来，考生应该根据图示和试题要求确定文体。这是对考生进行综合考查的一种作文。
看图写作，可以提供一幅图表，也可以提供几幅连续的图画。它不仅要求考生具有一定的观察能力，而且要求考生具有能够用英语造句、思维的能力。看图写作要求考生要仔细观察所提供的图画，抓住画面所要表达的中心思想，还应注意画面的细节。只有宏观和微观相结合，才能读懂图意、抓住要点。只有深入体会画图者的创作意图，才能了解作者在颂扬什么、反对什么或讽刺什么。考生还应发挥自己的想像，将整个故事或情节顺理成章地转化为形象的文字，图画语言—想像语言—文字语言是符合中国学生实际情况的。
与其他文体的写作方式不同，看图作文有其独特的一面。为了让广大学生能更好地掌握看图作文的写作技巧，现介绍英语看图作文的“五步法”：
1.仔细审图：看图作文的成败关键在于审图。在读图的过程中，可以根据图画内容列出写作提纲，列出重点的单词、词组或句型，然后连句成文。审图不当会闹出笑话。所以，审图就是细心观察画面，弄清画意，把握其实质内涵。
2.把握要点：弄懂画意之后，必须把几幅图的要点及逻辑要点简单标示出来，并写出每幅图的主题句。
3.扩充细节：根据每幅图的主题句的先后关系和前后关联的逻辑，分别对已写要点进行扩写，补充图与图之间的细节内容，如时间、地点、方式、原因、结果以及心理活动等。
4.连接成文：在主题句扩充的基础上，根据图画这间的情节发展先后，运用恰当连词或过渡词，对所有的句子进行逻辑整理，使之连接并构成意思连贯的语段，以免造成行文的机械，呆板和唐突。
5.检查全篇：对初步完成的语篇还要仔细检查和反复修改，才作最后定稿。检查范围的要点包括：(1)词法、句法有无问题；(2)要点和细节有无遗漏；(3)语义是否连贯，衔接是否合理；(4)拼写、标点有无错误；(5)字数是否符合要求等等。
总之，运用“五步法”看图作文写作，须真正做到审图抓要点，写出主题句，扩充连成文，语义要连贯，逻辑要合理，完稿细查看。
如何根据图表写短文
成于图表的短文一般可分为三类：叙述类、说明类和议论类。叙述类可包括根据图表写出的日记；说明类可包括个人生平、履历、通知或交待某些注意事项的留言条，根据路线图给人指路和对图表中数字进行客观的分析解释等；议论类则可指分析图表中所给数字，并就这些数字所反映出的事实做出个人评价。
根据图表写短文，要注意以下几个方面：
第一，审清题目，根据要求选择适当的表达方式和文体。如要求中只提到采用短文形式，则考生便可自主作宽范围的选择。如题中有特殊要求，如“作简单评论”，考生则需要从评论的角度考虑问题。在确定了表达方式以后，还要注意选择适当的文体。不同的文体有不同的要求。如正式的信函形式要求有信头、信内地址，呼语，文末根据对象不同有Yours sinerely或Yours faithfully及本人签名等，而普通朋友之间的信函可不写信内地址，称呼可直接写成诸如“Dear John”样的形式，信末可写成Yours sincerely或Yours即可，如是亲密朋友，则会更简单一些。而文体选择合适与否，格式是否正确，也是评分标准中的一条，不能忽视。
第二，要注意图表内信息的连接方式。图表中的信息之间虽然有内在的联系，但在表格中的体现形式却是各自独立的，因此考生在写作时切不可照表硬搬，逐字翻译，否则写出来的短文会像一盘散沙，没有凝聚点，混乱滞涩。考生应学会灵活地使用连接词、撤消代词等，适当地根据自己的需要和文章的进展调整信息出现的顺序。由于题目通常有词数的限制，因此在表格内容比较丰富，有些信息可能不具备提及的重要性时，可适当地删减其中的一些以满足题目的要求。
提到题目的词数要求，有必要提供考生注意以下两点。通常题目在提及词数要求时，有两种方式，一是给出词数允许区间，如100—120词，二是给出模糊数字，如110左右。根据以往的评分规则，给出区间的应将词数限制在此区间内。给出模糊数字的，通常允许考生的短文长度在此数字上下浮动，过多或过少都要扣分。因此在满足了表达方式、文体等的要求后，词数要求成了考生同样不可忽视的一个方面。这就要求考生在保证方式正确、格式规范、语句通顺的前提下应补充或删减部分细节。删减的细节必须不损害文章大意，增添的细节必须和文中内容有紧密的联系，或可作为补充说明，或可起到修饰作用。
总之，根据图表写出的短文，应做到格式正确、语句顺畅、逻辑连贯，并应在词数要求的范围内尽可能简单明了地包含最多的信息。
